tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post1438722838006055038..comments2024-03-28T13:53:04.287-05:00Comments on Bayou Renaissance Man: Second fantasy novel excerptPeterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10595089829300831372noreply@blogger.comBlogger34125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-27742030878780547102016-12-22T19:39:04.883-06:002016-12-22T19:39:04.883-06:00Another for the first one. I don't know why, b...Another for the first one. I don't know why, but this one didn't grab me as well. I'll read both, but the first had an urgency to it this one didn't.Alfred Genessonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14286804037036777378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-68901506665451614032016-12-22T06:02:28.803-06:002016-12-22T06:02:28.803-06:00I like them both but I prefer the first one. I like them both but I prefer the first one. Francis Turnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239588633595604498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-46494659193707698592016-12-22T01:56:16.036-06:002016-12-22T01:56:16.036-06:00Old guy first. Please.
I don't have a problem...Old guy first. Please.<br /><br />I don't have a problem with series.<br /> Actually, the only real problem is when the author doesn't continue the story. I understand the various reasons that single books don't turn into a continuing storyline. Hmm, one of the most frustrating situations is when a book does really well, and the author seems not to have considered ahead of time how to follow up. The next book or two seem to lack the detail and drive that was so evident to start with.<br />So, my advice is to always try to write the first in such a manner that the story can be continued, if it is well received. Not always practical, I know. For that matter, you don't have to alert the public that the book they are looking at will have x-number of followup books. Frankly, I think that is counterproductive. I'd rather get to the end of a book, and think, "wow, I wonder if there is more written on this". If I don't find it right away, I'll keep it in mind to check later on. Knowing ahead of time that there are 5 or 10 more books scheduled in a series can be daunting, and I might not start at all.<br /> <br />BTW, this is from someone who used to read two books a day minimum, every day, from 4th(?) grade on. When I would move to a new school, or town, I'd hit the SciFi section and just start at "A" and move toward "Z". I did all of high school in the same school, and still attended 13 schools. I'd try to read the entire library before the next move, sigh...Willhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722792638246578812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-80889174401507522082016-12-21T21:16:07.806-06:002016-12-21T21:16:07.806-06:00I also prefer yesterday's excerpt. If I may, ...I also prefer yesterday's excerpt. If I may, I noticed you described the kid's bow as having "compound" limbs. I believe that means having pulleys and cables, or at least some other device to provide mechanical advantage. "Composite" limbs refers to using different materials, like horn, wood, and sinew. Minor quibble from a guy who likes bows.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-75656155665756740602016-12-21T19:47:44.203-06:002016-12-21T19:47:44.203-06:00Peter,
I'm yet another one who liked the firs...Peter,<br /><br />I'm yet another one who liked the first excerpt better, but I really like the idea of this one in a more Renaissance-ish setting, and I look forward to this one too once it's written. Thanks again for writing all these wonderful stories for us :)TheAxehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04328271483659507053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-4258793395815917462016-12-21T18:59:02.332-06:002016-12-21T18:59:02.332-06:00I liked the first one much better. I agree with w...I liked the first one much better. I agree with what everyone else has said about the comparative rarity of older heroes who have to use their wits to compensate for declining physical skills, but that's not the only reason. The first excerpt has staying power; I woke up this morning thinking, "Now, where's that story I was reading last night? Must continue it." -- only to remember that it hadn't been written yet. Obviously, I've just read the second excerpt, but I don't think there's any chance of the same thing happening tomorrow. The second one may yet be a good story, and I may yet buy it and read it, but this bit of it just didn't grab me. I've read too many stories like it before. Please write the first one first, and remember to let us know that it *is* the first one when you publish it.dixonmnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-231489365604806992016-12-21T18:31:14.074-06:002016-12-21T18:31:14.074-06:00Ok, I like them both, but I liked yesterday's ...Ok, I like them both, but I liked yesterday's better. Maybe because it was longer? Felt more fleshed out? Besides, what is in those saddlebags???<br /><br />Seriously, I would finish yesterday's story first, and then work on this one. I suspect that while both may be able to stand alone, both will turn into trilogies, given time, and folk's responses.<br /><br />Just my 2 cents...and thank you for asking for opinions. <br /><br />SuzSuzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07117433684554337583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-13133526344312538102016-12-21T18:08:57.925-06:002016-12-21T18:08:57.925-06:00I go with the majority. Let's have the old guy...I go with the majority. Let's have the old guy first.FrankChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07349761659165064987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-12579783612100489962016-12-21T17:12:53.061-06:002016-12-21T17:12:53.061-06:00Your next western obviously. ;-)
I like the young...Your next western obviously. ;-)<br /><br />I like the young archer. I need some escape from my aches and pains....Richardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05794819428417507627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-84690277300677977702016-12-21T16:54:42.388-06:002016-12-21T16:54:42.388-06:00I'd prefer to read yesterday's first. Lik...I'd prefer to read yesterday's first. Like others, I recognize the second posting as something you'd posted before. I like it, but I like the other one much better. Thanks for soliciting input!Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06822829608903050895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-90735440420486365882016-12-21T16:28:59.212-06:002016-12-21T16:28:59.212-06:00I'll read both, and anything else you write, b...I'll read both, and anything else you write, but prefer yesterday's.jbrocknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-33312555149814315002016-12-21T16:12:09.384-06:002016-12-21T16:12:09.384-06:00We're getting both of them. That's all I ...We're getting both of them. That's all I care about.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-74174132514180357952016-12-21T15:30:14.207-06:002016-12-21T15:30:14.207-06:00The first one. Even if it does conjure memories o...The first one. Even if it does conjure memories of Zork (who stole if from Jack Vance, who probably borrowed it from the Norwegians, etc., etc.). <br /><br />Also, our elderly hero seems to have hesitated a bit at the doorway inside the inn, as it were. I know things happen fast in combat, but up, spin, grab for (miss as it's kicked over, fumble for, snatch/stab... *then* get attacked seems like either this is a very large room or Owain hesitated.<br /><br />Look forward to reading these. Happy writing, and my money's ready when your part is done. *grin*Dan Lanenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-73028576890812082592016-12-21T15:01:33.250-06:002016-12-21T15:01:33.250-06:00The market is full of stories about young heroes; ...The market is full of stories about young heroes; older action heroes are a rarity.Quentinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-8643587507303895792016-12-21T14:50:49.295-06:002016-12-21T14:50:49.295-06:00I think I like the first best. My only comment wou...I think I like the first best. My only comment would be to please try to limit the series to 3 or 4 books. I've abandoned a couple of series this year that had gotten into double digits in the # of books. It just gets to be too much.<br /><br />Keep up the good work.MBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12574128282974068056noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-10297857211548962592016-12-21T13:56:53.357-06:002016-12-21T13:56:53.357-06:00Dennis
Both are good and very interesting but I h...Dennis<br /><br />Both are good and very interesting but I have to lead with the first writings. Thank you for letting us see the beginning work of the novels.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-35529306402972904752016-12-21T13:21:51.129-06:002016-12-21T13:21:51.129-06:00As an old guy, I prefer the feel of the first exce...As an old guy, I prefer the feel of the first excerpt. It reminds me a little of the late David Gemmels character, Druss and I mean that in a good way. BadFroghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00051102067870927677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-38482837209989387622016-12-21T12:53:26.944-06:002016-12-21T12:53:26.944-06:00Go with the first one. It opens new ground with we...Go with the first one. It opens new ground with weapons and world. And... it's well underway. agree with the group on liking a more venerated hero. Some of us are getting there so it is easier to relate. I like the "Old age and guile will beat youth and magic" trail of thought.The second one is more along the lines of "Brings the Lightning" and will no doubt be a ripping yarn and worth some of my fun tickets to ride along. From a marketing point of view, you definitely need to look at your demographics. Cheers!Aeropundithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17851084238422671358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-64722983253898309112016-12-21T12:46:32.819-06:002016-12-21T12:46:32.819-06:00I also prefer the first one. I did recognize the s...I also prefer the first one. I did recognize the second one from when you posted it before. I think the reason the first one is more widely preferred is that there's more to the main character, at least in these excerpts.<br /><br />One potential reason to do the one in the Renaissance setting first: if they're set in a common world (which you've given no indication of), and neither has been finished, then you may find yourself including plot ideas in the later setting that should have been addressed in the story set in the earlier time.wheelshttp://bendreth.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-34551250838922958712016-12-21T12:10:36.106-06:002016-12-21T12:10:36.106-06:00I liked the first one better as well.I liked the first one better as well.Mikehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00192121247584828848noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-47350917114917576102016-12-21T11:09:20.711-06:002016-12-21T11:09:20.711-06:00Have to side with the group.
Tired creaky old fart...Have to side with the group.<br />Tired creaky old fart first, then the kid.<br />Will buy them both of course, but not surprisingly I identified with the old guy better.<br />And am looking forward with anticipation to the next installment of the western saga.Uncle Larhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04008207593205949098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-60743409713628806392016-12-21T11:00:28.295-06:002016-12-21T11:00:28.295-06:00Saddlebags. Hm. Peter has never mentioned that he ...Saddlebags. Hm. Peter has never mentioned that he owns <a rel="nofollow">href ="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chekhov%27s_gun" Chekhov's gun,</a> but it seems that he does.Peter Bnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-16880833613355059272016-12-21T10:30:09.042-06:002016-12-21T10:30:09.042-06:00I'm much more of a SF than fantasy reader but ...I'm much more of a SF than fantasy reader but I do think the first one appeals to me more. In part as I too am no longer a young man. I wonder if amazon can give you a sales breakdown by age? <br /><br />Looking forward to the next western as well. Glad you are doing much better health wise.<br /><br />Have a glorious 2017<br />Paul Mogrithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03403850012381295251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-10672083560802385702016-12-21T10:16:33.692-06:002016-12-21T10:16:33.692-06:00Yep, this is the snippet you posted a while back I...Yep, this is the snippet you posted a while back I was asking about. I'm definitely interested in both stories as well as anything else you may come with (I'm with Jeff Woods on this), but I think your approach in finishing the one from yesterday and then switching to this one works better - remember, everyone is waiting avidly for your next book, so stop idling around and get back to writing :-)<br />Joking aside, I wish you and your family good health, merry Christmas and a happy new year so you can keep providing us with great stories!CGR710https://www.blogger.com/profile/15505866142053585054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6244999628674918029.post-14299400110355915252016-12-21T09:59:36.878-06:002016-12-21T09:59:36.878-06:00@Rev. Paul: No, the Kaladi tribe was my idea, as ...@Rev. Paul: No, the Kaladi tribe was my idea, as a giggle for my Alaskan readers.<br /><br />:-)Peterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10595089829300831372noreply@blogger.com